A research proposal I sent out today - comments?
Brian Rice
water@tunes.org
Wed Jun 27 09:20:02 2001
>Just a small marketing tip: replace "would" with "will". That will make
>it sound less like you are begging them to help you make one of your
>dreams come true and more like you are presenting them the inevitable
>future and giving them a chance to get on board early on.
Of course, this is exactly the thing I would not have considered. :)
>In the related projects part, I feel there is some distant similarity
>between your arrow work and Ted Nelson's ZigZag:
>
> http://www.sfc.keio.ac.jp/~ted/
>
>When reading your proposal, any hype saavy evaluator will think
>"doesn't XML already do this?" So you might want to write a line or two
>on why it doesn't.
Hm. I see. That might be a little trickier to explain. I'll see if I
can incorporate that, though. Thanks.
>Thanks for sharing this with us,
>-- Jecel
And thanks for your feedback,
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